Broken, you and I.
This challenge has ended!
Something is terribly, terribly wrong.
You hold in your hand a flower of blue, only to blink and find it a flower of red. You blink again and in your hand a bird lies dead and still. With trembling fingers you place the bird upon the granite altar here, in the quiet of your mind. When you step away, the old woman beside you wakes. When does the bus arrive? It should have been here, she says. Always comes by now.
Down the road you see a man under a street lamp. Your eyes meet despite the distance. What is that in his hand? A blade of flawless obsidian. He brings it up to your neck, but you are yourself no longer, and you watch from under the streetlight as the man waiting for the bus cuts open his own throat.
To each his own. You have tea to make.
Write a story which does not make sense because it can’t make sense. It can’t make sense because the place in which the story unfolds is broken. Or maybe the story is broken. Maybe both are fine and your eyes are bleeding.
Let’s find out.
- Started March 16th, 2011.
- Ended April 2nd, 2011.
- Created by Silven
Think you have what it takes to accept this challenge?
Challengers
Discussion
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Sir Bic
(wait that may have not sounded right.)
Congratulations nagi_schwarz, phenomenal job!
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Sir Bic
There were many out-of-the-ordinary challengers, but only one extra-ordinary champion!
This was a great challenge Silven. Lots of good stuff here!
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H.S. Wift
My first idea is formed in a trilogy. Enjoy.
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H.S. Wift
I have 3 ideas. If you don’t mind, I shall pursue all of them.
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Silven
I think first person is preferable when trying to describe a broken mind or when the story plays with perception. Third person seems to be used more often when there a lot more elements tossed in.
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Lighty
I keep checking back here, each story is so different from the next.
Thing I find most interesting is the ratio of first person to the third person narration in the stories. Do you think it is easier to create the sense of broken-ness using a personal voice or just a matter of preference?
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Kihd
It’s for the one I already did, so thanks.
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Silven
Also, yeah, kihd, whether you’re talking about the story you’ve already submitted or another idea- go for it.
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Silven
You’re all incredible.
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Tad Winslow
If ever a challenge epitomized poetry! This represents the mindset of fluid art.
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Kihd
So I came up with a halfway decent idea, but it does slightly make sense, at least to me. You just have to reeeeally stretch the menaings and read between the lines I guess. Is that okay?
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Kihd
Your challenge description reminds me of some twisted Stephen King book…awesome.
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Silven
This is turning out better than I expected.
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Scrawler's Secret
This will take some thought. A challenging challenge.
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