Ivory Tickles [tooth fairy challenge]

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Was I dreaming? Music played softly, ensnaring my senses like a fog of burning incense, tendrils of it gripping my brain. I was guided to a room where I imagined I could see the music dancing in the air. My guardian pushed me into a seafoam green, latex cushioned chair. My eyes hung half lidded in the rapture the music elicited. I didn’t know why, but I was scared.

“You’re going to help us make music,” my guardian said. She held a set of metal pliers in her hands. I couldn’t gather my thoughts enough to process what was happening. “Just relax, it’ll be over before you know it!” Her voice was cheerful and went with the music perfectly, but there was something about it that made me shiver.

“No,” I protested groggily. “I should go, my mommy will wonder where I am.”

“Hush child,” she said. I struggled, but she held me down. I screamed as the silver pliers swam before my eyes. Pain bloomed in my jaw as she ripped out one of my molars, spilling blood down my chin. The tooth fairy grinned, “One down, 31 to go.”

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  1. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    creepy!
    i love that the music is intoxicating, but ew, what an ending!

  2. Avatar Krulltar

    Well done and creepy.

  3. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    That was the most disturbing Tooth Fairy story I’ve ever read. Great job turning something lovely into something really scary. Got to give you credit for the original angle.

  4. Avatar Zerrakhi

    Better late than never. Before the Christmas break I was too busy to judge this thing, and during the break I couldn’t log in to Ficly on the computer I was using. Anyway, here are my thoughts.

    You’ve certainly put a twist in the tale, and I’ll give you credit for that.

    However, I think that someone who hadn’t read the challenge description would probably miss the point, because you don’t actually mention anything about a piano or ivory (except in the title). One might be forgiven for assuming that the sound of a human screaming is music to the ears of fairies! You could have given a few more hints, such as a picture of an elephant on the door, or simply mentioning a piano in conjunction with the music. (Actually I imagine that music played on a fairy piano would be too high-pitched for a human to hear, but fairy tales don’t have to care about physics.)

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