The Sky is a Battlefield

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You shine, you shine
Upon the earth
Thank you for
Your blissful worth.

Thank you for
Your swaying light
Which sticks with us
Until the night.

To grace the sky
Your foe awaits
Until, until
It does get late.

The battle begins
With both in view
You’re jealous of him
He’s jealous of you.

One must die
One folds their cards
And when one falls
One falls down hard.

The other becomes
The God of the sky
The only object
To grace the eye.

A daily battle
To reign the high
He can not share
Someone must die.

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  1. Avatar Elisabeth L. Davis(LoA)

    Oh wow. Very good, the rhymes weren’t forced, the rhythm was perfect, and the topic is just vague enough to provoke the imagination. Good job.

  2. Avatar blusparrow (LoA)

    awesoomeee. A lot of different ways to think about this and thats very cool. I like the rhythm.

  3. Avatar Stovohobo

    That’s intense. And yes, I clicked because of the title. Very nice rhythm.

    Though I might change “them” and “they’re” to a regular pronoun like “him” or “her.” Not only is it grammatically correct, I think it adds a little more personality.

  4. Avatar One Time, One Chance

    Thanks, steven – I like your suggestion.

  5. Avatar Stovohobo

    Cool, ‘cause that’s my favorite stanza.

  6. Avatar .:Band Baby:.

    This is a very good poem OTOC =) and I agree with everything everyone else said above

  7. Avatar Nymphaea Rose

    Touche with band baby. Were you a poet back on Ficlets? I can’t remember. And lol to you saying in your profile about Icy Tea. That stuff is ahmazing

  8. Avatar One Time, One Chance

    @Nymphaea Rose: I had a few series going, but I found myself writing more and more poems as time went on.

    And, why yes, I could live on Icy Tea. ;) Great to find another addict!

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