Reflections in the barley

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Katie stood tall, watching the familiar yet ever-changing dance of the wind in the barley. David’s strong hand enfolded hers; her free hand rested protectively on the bump in her belly: a baby, a flesh-and-blood baby, doing what nature intended.

“Who will harvest this now?” he asked.
She looked up at him for a moment before pressing her back to him. He circled her with his arms and touched his cheek to hers as they surveyed the farmland that had, so recently, belonged to her parents. “You know,” she said quietly, “it doesn’t matter any more.”

They stood a moment longer, watching the dance and listening to the wind in the power lines, before she said “let’s go home.”

They held hands again and walked back towards the car. “How do you feel?” he asked.

“Human,” she said, “I feel human.”

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  1. Avatar ethelthefrog

    This piece is five years after the previous piece.

    The very beginning of this story is at
    http://ficly.com/stories/11014

  2. Avatar stargazer1960

    The story has some very nice images throughout. I like the ending here. Some of the steps along the way(hospital scenes) were a little choppy, but overall it has a nice effect.

  3. Avatar ethelthefrog

    Valid criticism. I was suffering from an insane desire just to get this story finished last night, and the quality suffered a bit.

    Mea culpa.

  4. Avatar dkscully

    You made it. Well done!

    I’d be interested to see what you’d make of it if you took what you’ve got and moved it outside the constrictions of the 1024 character scenes, but it works well as it stands.

  5. Avatar ethelthefrog

    Thank you. It was quite hard work to fit some scenes into the limit and I had to leave a lot to the reader’s imagination. It would have been rather different in nature in a freer format. Of course, having got here, I’d never start from where I did.

    Anyway, thank you for the comments and for the inspiration to write this whole thing in the first place.

  6. Avatar Jenni Summers

    Thank you for this. I really enjoyed it! You are a really good writer and if I can be as good as you one day I’ll be very happy! =D

  7. Avatar ethelthefrog

    Given that I design chips for a living, being called a good writer is the highlight of my day so far. Thank you for making an engineer happy.

  8. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    so I assume the cyber was exposed, the parents were taken in, but i’m disappointed in the field harvest, see, they should be like “We need to provide for our human future”.

  9. Avatar ethelthefrog

    Too much pain in that farm. It will be harvested, but she is putting distance between her past and her brighter future.

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