Love sees all

Avatar Author: blacksheepdances complicated wanna-be fiction novelist and avid reader Read Bio

Stop ignoring me.

I said I loved you. Why do you pretend you don’t hear?

That collection of quirks and contradictions that make up you? They are touching. Endearing. Yet you try to erase them, as if they don’t exist.

You step on a rock with your soft bare feet, and curse yourself for it. Why not curse the rock?

I know who you really are. You try to be tough and aloof, but you still hide the tampons in the bottom of the cart, denying your womanhood. I know you suck in your gut when you are around your friend’s husband, and how you stand a little straighter. I see you raise your eyebrows and smile slightly when the villain glares at the screen (you never did fall for the heroes, did you?).

The people that hate you for what you did: you pretend you don’t care. But at night, when you should be asleep, your defense never rests. You plead your case silently, rehearsing your testimony. You think if you could just explain it, they might forgive you and love you again.

Why is my love not real enough to you?

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Comments (2 so far!)

  1. Avatar thelostgirl

    This is a very dramatic piece, operatic in a way. There is so much great description in this. I really love it.

    Her reaction to villians and cursing herself instead of the rock are nice little touches.

    I’ll hold off rating until the end of the challenge but I really like this.

  2. Avatar Tomboy

    Well written. Our inner voice tells us things we don’t want to hear. You can’t fool it. You can’t shut it up. You can’t divorce it. It is your worst critic when you make mistakes and your best friend when you make things right. Who do you want to spend the rest of your life with?

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