Severed Ties

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Ava sauntered into Rafferty’s office, her package mixed with the empty boxes she had procured from the mail room. She gave Rafferty a sympathetic look as she handed him one of the boxes. “They’re letting you go,” more statement than question.

Rafferty opened a drawer and began emptying it into the box. “After ten years and a ninety percent case resolution rate,” he spat. He threw a handful of medals into the box. “You can bet your ass that Spence did a lot of arm twisting to get this through.”

Ava took her package to the filing cabinet, surreptitiously removed its contents, and placed them behind the container as she placed files into a box. “I’m going to miss seeing that pretty face,” she cooed, bringing the files to Rafferty. He gave her a peck on the cheek, gathered the boxes, and left.

The bomb exploded as Rafferty left the premises. He knew from the demolished section of the building where the blast had originated. He swore under his breath and sped off in his Aston Martin.

Rafferty was on his own.

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  1. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    nice! The bomb is a great touch.
    I think it’s time we spent some time with Rafferty, though I like this series and Ava.

  2. Avatar kaellinn18

    That was the first thing I thought of when she retrieved the “smuggled” package. I thought it would fit the story arc nicely for Ava to frame Rafferty and force him on the lam. It works even better since he was fired. :-)

  3. Avatar Blossom Ruoquen (LoA)

    Sly mistress that she is! ha, unfortunately I didn’t get what was going on until I read the comments looks abashedly at keyboard

  4. Avatar kaellinn18

    I’m not sure what to tell you except maybe read more carefully? I don’t how it could be made any clearer. Suggestions are welcome.

  5. Avatar Mostly Harmless

    This moves the plot in a really interesting direction – I was hoping someone would put Rafferty in an ‘on-his-own’ situation, and you’ve done that better than any way I had ideas for…!

    My only real concern is with Rafferty’s dialogue – “You can bet your ass…” in particular grated a bit for me – not exactly the language of the distinguished gentleman of razor-sharp mind, even if he is a bit irate…

    Still, plot-wise this is excellent, and I did enjoy it – MH :)

  6. Avatar kaellinn18

    I actually debated with myself over that line, but any substitution I came up with didn’t get across how pissed off he actually is. This guy, a star agent, is being thrown to the wolves after ten years of service. I don’t care how sophisticated you are, you’re going to swear.

  7. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    A little sketchy there at the end, but I got what you meant. The package to Baby Bear was a bomb, snuck into his belongings, which he left without, thus avoiding the assassination attempt and tipping him off. Something about that second-to-last paragraph just wound up hard to follow.

  8. Avatar kaellinn18

    It wasn’t placed in his belongings, it was hidden behind the filing cabinet. The intent was never to kill Rafferty, only to set him up.

  9. Avatar Abby (LoA)

    “They’re letting you go.” Probably the most horrible euphamism in the world! Apart from “passing on!”

    Nice part, good continuation!
    Abby x

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