Second Chancers - Black Sail

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The glow was starting to fade on the horizon, losing its blue tint to the grey clouds. Stefnir’s eyes narrowed to a tight squint in an effort to see through the thickening snowfall.

Then it was gone. The afternoon sky had returned to its regular, dreary self.

Stefnir’s mind was racing with questions as to what he had seen. What power could have caused such a thing? Should I report to Gunnar what I have seen? Will they mock me as a mad man? Am I, in fact, mad?

Then, through the white haze, Stefnir saw a black sail on the horizon. The Exiles’ sails were red, so perhaps this was some new foe. New friends were scarce.

It was approaching fast. Far faster than any vessel he had seen before. In moments, it had traveled at least ten vika.

“Impossible!” Stefnir exclaimed to no one.

Suddenly, his eyes went from a focused squint to gaping shock. This was like no sea vessel he’d ever seen. The water was not crashing against its hull. It did not rest among the waves, but floated just above them.

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  1. Avatar John Perkins

    Interesting turn of events here. Seems as though the glow was caused by the time travel.

    You’ve created a very vivid world here, and I’m quite invested in the character and the story.

    And how awesome is it that the ship not only hovers above water, but still uses a sail?

  2. Avatar Mostly Harmless

    !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    With regards to where you’ve moved this, the above string of precisely 42 exclamation marks may just about sum up the utter awesomeness you’ve packed into 1024 characters.

    Your prose is flowing and beautiful, but at the same time you’re setting up some kind of epic action piece (potentially) which is a nice mixture to see – I’m very much hooked! MH :)

  3. Avatar Browncoatben

    Gents…thanks.

    Oh…and MH…if you think the precise number of exclamation marks got past me unnoticed, you would be wrong.

    For it is the answer…

    To life…

    The Universe…

    And Everything…

  4. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Very exciting installment and has a pretty good feel for transitioning from the beginning mood piece to more action and more of what the story will be about.

  5. Avatar kaellinn18

    This was an awesome continuation from the first piece. The floating ship is, of course, great, but I loved reading Stefnir’s transition from “am I crazy?” to “this is not good!”

  6. Avatar JLaughter001

    MORE!

  7. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    wonderful! what they said, and bravo!

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