Disillusioned

Avatar Author: kaellinn18 Follow me on Twitter: http://twitter.com/kaellinn18 I love to write. One of my life goals is to write a novel, but right now work, church, and family take up most of my spare time. This site helps me scratch that writi... Read Bio

Evan entered the hospital and walked over to the information desk. A middle-aged woman with horn-rimmed glasses and too much makeup gave him a tired smile. “Can I help you, young man?”

Evan nervously smoothed down the front of his shirt. “I’m here to see, uh, my dad. I mean, Roger. Roger Emmerson?” He tapped his fingers on the counter. The receptionist placed a comforting hand on top of his.

“It’s alright. I’ll find out what room he’s in.” She typed on a computer for a few seconds. “He’s in room 305. Sign in here. The elevators are around the corner.” Evan struggled through his signature, thanked her, and walked over to the elevators.

When the doors opened he stepped in and pressed three. As they closed, he leaned against the wall and tried to steady his breathing. He still couldn’t believe this was happening. After all the years of searching, he’d finally found out who his father was. He was going to be able to catch up on all the time they’d missed out on.

And then he’d learned his father was dying.

View this story's details

Prequels

Oh no! This story doesn't have a prequel. Want to fill in the blanks and write one?

Sequels

Oh no! This story doesn't have a sequel. Want to fill in the blanks and write one?

Comments (8 so far!)

Average Reader Rating

  1. Avatar Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

    Ah the cruelty of life.
    Will you follow this up?

  2. Avatar kaellinn18

    I wasn’t planning to. Feel free to sequel if you want!

  3. Avatar Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

    I doubt I could follow it up is as perfect a fashion =]

  4. Avatar kaellinn18

    No worries! Better than it languishing here on its own!

  5. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    He’d better find out if it was genetic! Whomever sequels, it will be an awkward moment, to say the least!

  6. Avatar Horrorfan13

    Wow. I think a parent dying is everyone’s worst nightmare, but to not know them and then to find out you may never….harsh. Good job.

  7. Avatar Mostly Harmless

    Really good characterisation of the central character here – I mean pitch-perfect, very realistic. Spookily, my mum is in hospital at the minute: Room 305!

    She isn’t going to die though…

    Anyhoo, good work – MH :)

  8. Avatar kaellinn18

    Wow, that is a bit creepy, Ed. Hope your mom gets better soon!

This story's tags are