Reality Pills

Avatar Author: Concerned Reader I ain't a writer right now, and I probably wont be one in the future, but I sure as hell enjoy the act of writing. I've only just started writing in the past few years, and even then have only produced short stories and s... Read Bio

Telling my parents about Franz was a bad idea. They sent me to a counselor to help “get my head on straight.” Dr. Slacks gave me a bottle of pills that rattled when you shook it. They smelled funny.

Franz told me not to take them. I trust Franz, so I didn’t. My parents noticed that the bottle wasn’t rattling any less, so they smashed one up and put it in my food. That was the day that Franz almost died. After eating, I felt kinda weird. Like one of those police guys was taping off part of my mind.

It wasn’t until later that I noticed Franz wasn’t looking so good. His usually colorful body was drooping, and the color was dripping down his legs. He didn’t move much, but just lay there, fading away. I wasn’t about to let him disappear, so I grabbed my big old box of markers; all 24 of them. With all of the imagination I could muster, I drew Franz’s color back on.

The pills wore off about six hours later. I’m not too good at art, so Franz didn’t look as good as he used to, but he was alive.

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  1. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    what did he draw on? I am intrigued at how you show us the inside of his mind. :)

  2. Avatar Mostly Harmless

    This is really good stuff – the narrative voice of your character is beautifully innocent, and this idea that you can draw things back to life is possibly a young child’s view on mortality generally, represented through this imagined character…

    Strong stuff, lots of potential – really good writing! MH :)

  3. Avatar Concerned Reader

    He drew on what he believed to be the physical body of Franz.

    Thanks, MH. I’ve got more planned for this series. I’ve just got to find the time.

  4. Avatar ActingAize

    This is really great! Tell me when you write a book, because I would defiantly buy it :D

  5. Avatar Concerned Reader

    Thanks! I’m totally planning to expand this one out into a full short story at some point. I’ll be sure to link you to it.

  6. Avatar Robert Quick

    I really like this both for the story and the ideas that are driving the story. I don’t have any criticisms but I would like to see more about the protagonist and Franz go “monster hunting” and having adventures. In a freaky way, Franz reminds me of Frank the Bunny (from Donnie Darko, who has been a source of unforgiving nightmares for me) but I hope that is more similarity of names rather than me just feeding my fears. I am intrigued and looking forward to a self-made sequel (which I don’t like as much usually…)

  7. Avatar Mr.Gabriel

    Wow, really good. It sucked me in from the beginning. I was so sad at the end. Although he does seem a tad bit crazy…

  8. Avatar Concerned Reader

    Hard to tell, isn’t it?

    Thanks for reading!

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