Suicide (repost for challenge)

Avatar Author: Concerned Reader I ain't a writer right now, and I probably wont be one in the future, but I sure as hell enjoy the act of writing. I've only just started writing in the past few years, and even then have only produced short stories and s... Read Bio

I’ve got suicide on my mind.
It’s drifting through my thoughts.

I’ve got suicide on my mind.
Not my own, but yours.

I hope it solved your problems,
Because it’s left me with my own.

You’ve left me so many questions,
About why you had to go.

Was it all my fault?
Did I cause you to leave?

If I did, I didn’t mean it.
It wasn’t in my plans.

I’ve got suicide on my mind.
I don’t understand it.

Why would you just leave us,
to worry on our own?

Why didn’t we see it,
before you drowned your soul?

I’ve got to stop this thinking,
it’s driving me insane.

I’ve got suicide on my mind.
I’m your brother, all alone.

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Comments (4 so far!)

  1. Avatar Concerned Reader

    After talking to someone about this, we came to the conclusion that this was written by a dragon. Here’s the reasoning:
    Me- It sounds like he killed his sister’s rider for some reason, which caused her to commit suicide. And now he’s probably suicidal. Possibly because he doesn’t have a rider of his own either.

    Kyky- I think he killed his sister’s rider knowing she would commit suicide—which he regrets and is now admonishing himself for his evil deeds. So now i have to figure out how to write this into a short story.
  2. Avatar stargazer1960

    I don’t think that you should explain poetry so much as let the reader find the meaning from it.
    That is the lovely thing about poetry. It welcomes many meanings.

  3. Avatar Concerned Reader

    I agree completely. That’s what I love about poetry. it’s open to interpretation.

  4. Avatar Paige Elizabeth

    Well done. Good job expressing the thoughts and feelings of those left behind.

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