Helen's Sunday

Avatar Author: ElshaHawk (LoA) Read, Rate, Comment, or send me a note! Pyro dubbed me sequel queen! http://ficly.com/stories/7381 I am a member of the League of Awesomeness: the Mistress of Well-Intentioned Indecision. I am Mistress Elshanor o... Read Bio

She’d visited the cemetery every Sunday after church. It was right across the road. The grass had grown in this spring over the turned earth. She’d told him all about Clyde Wilcox making eyes at her during service and complimenting her dress.

She rode back to her home in Margie’s car.

“Come with me to Bingo, Helen! You need to get out of that house more than twice a week.”

“Marge. I don’t feel like it. Not yet. I don’t want their eyes on me.”
Margie sighed and gave up this time.

Helen climbed her front steps slowly and unlocked the door to a stale house. A small mewing made her stop. A tiny kitten clung to a branch of one of her tall bushes.

She took it inside and gave it a dish of milk. “Where’s your family, huh?” she sighed.
“You need someone to look after you for a while.” The kitten licked its face and then curled up in her lap for a nap. The soft purring soothed Helen’s loneliness.

“You’re quite a charmer, much better than Clyde!” she joked. Her heart warmed a little. She thought about Bingo.

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  1. Avatar Fyora Cartagan

    Awwww!!! So cute!

  2. Avatar jesteram

    Good descriptors, good progression, good tackling of the challenge! I’m so glad you took it on!

  3. Avatar scratch'n'scrawl

    that was nice Elsha…keep up the good work.

  4. Avatar i, Coomber

    Great story, emotional and well written.

  5. Avatar Elice

    Aww..the sad life of a lonely old woman. I never want to grow old.

  6. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    I wanted to add so much more of her talking things out with the cat.. but I ran out of room. I had to just throw Bingo back in there at the end to give you some idea of her change.

  7. Avatar starfishpaws

    What a sweet little story

  8. Avatar jesteram

    Among all the contest entries, this stuck with me the most. It’s a quiet story with an understated but satisfying ending. It doesn’t try to be too much. Good work, and congratulations!

  9. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    thanks! wow!

  10. Avatar Pyropunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    there’s nothing that warms your lap (or your heart) like a small kitten !

  11. Avatar Spiderj

    Really effective. I’m impressed by how much of a character study people can fit into these limits!

  12. Avatar halfpenny

    This is a great little vignette…you really get a good sense of the woman’s inner workings, without it being over-obvious. Congrats!

  13. Avatar Wyatt Aapr LoA

    Great job Elsha. Funny, I pictured her as a young woman.

  14. Avatar Alexa Reed (LoA)

    Oh, poor Helen. I’m glad she has Kitty to help her.