The Good and the Bad

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Of course, as the situation demands, I call on some false bravado and appear unimpressed by the ease with which they caught me.

“Look, you know how this ends. So do I. You talk about your evil plan, I stop you, and everything is happily ever after.”

The cold steel of the handcuffs were firm, but luckily I’d had the foresight to palm a lockpick before they cuffed me.

“Ah, Mr Smith, you forgot your inside man, who is undoubtedly now trying to infiltrate my security settings, or perhaps cut the power so that you can escape.”

I kept my stiffest poker face but inside my heart started racing. Had they caught Jones? I mean, they were only your standard henchmen, after all. Nothing he couldn’t take care of, surely?

“Anyway, how do you like my secret underwater base? I do love the ambience. Oh, what are you fools waiting for? We’ve already shot the other idiot, just kill him now.”

I swore inwardly as my cuffs silently clicked open at the same time as the henchmen raised their guns.

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  1. Avatar C. Augusto Valdés

    Subtle, gets to the point, dramatic. Bravo!

  2. Avatar Mostly Harmless

    This is a challenge which relies on a clever incorporation of clichés, and you’ve done it well here – the monologuing, the inside man and the underwater base all add to the gloriously melodramatic feel the ends of action/spy films seem to have…

    Funny, neat entry – well done! MH :)

  3. Avatar HSAR

    Thank you – I’ve edited slightly because I didn’t really like the line about guns.

  4. Avatar Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

    Sam first let me offer my condolenses for your character’s slain henchman. It is hard to find a good henchman you can count on. It isn’t like you can call Hench-power and have them send one up, or go down to Hench-Mart.
    Sorry for getting side-tracked but i loved the story and it was like eating a cliche sundae. i do love a good sundae.

  5. Avatar Krulltar

    the only thing missing is the long winded diatribe by the bad guy… “I’m so much smarter than you…yada yada yaya…but before I kill you here’s my mastermind plan…yackity smackity…but perhaps I’ve said too much. I will now leave the room and assume my henchmen will kill you.”
    but I guess that would be too long for a 1024 ficly. It’s a good story given the space provided.

  6. Avatar HSAR

    The dialogue had to be cut, unfortunately. It may please you to know that it all used to be in there.

  7. Avatar smdasilva {LoA}

    I keep imagining Austin Powers and Dr. Eeeeevil (“One Million Dollars!”). Great genre-ing (is that a word?).

  8. Avatar Luke Nicolaou

    hey, congrats for the win Sam!

  9. Avatar HSAR

    Thanks to all who took the time to read this.

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