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The wind howled across the frozen tundra. David turned over in his sleeping bag. He was a fool and he might just die for it. He glanced over at the fire. It was getting low but he didn’t dare add more wood, not yet.

He looked back over the last few hours. He had been driving north in his new Jeep, on his way to a summer job in Alaska. He would make a lot of money over 5 months. David also wanted to see some of the sights and do some camping. That was why he had the sleeping bag. He also had a tent in the Jeep, but the late April ground had been too hard to erect it. The road was not well traveled and there were few service stations along the way. The Jeep had jerked to a halt just a few meters away from where he now lay, slowly freezing to death. If only he had brought the extra gas can, but the Jeep was already full. He had gathered what wood he could find, but there wasn’t much to be found in the barren landscape.

The fire flickered weakly. Should he put more wood on it? He reached out and fed the fire.

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  1. Avatar Robert Quick

    I deleted my comment on accident. Balls. So once again, this story reminds me of ‘To Build a Fire’ by Jack London. I think you did a good job bringing the need for fire into the fore front. Minor suggestions- I feel that the first sentence of the last paragraph should be the last sentence of the piece. It would give an extra final parallel to the man’s upcoming demise. I realize that changing anything at this point will be difficult because you’ve already used the allotted 1024 and it would change the last paragraph completely. If you manage that another minor suggestion would be to add maybe one more sentence about the lack of firewood. Both of these suggestions are minor- I already like the story.

  2. Avatar Luke Nicolaou

    Well, this is a very interesting story, but I feel it is more about the camper, rather than the fire. Don’t get me wrong, it’s still a great story, but it just doesn’t fit the challenge requirements. Just thought I’d let you know, just in case you wanted to make another entry.

  3. Avatar Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

    hey i left you a note. good story.

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