Brother Found, Brother Lost

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My brother found me in the strip club. A consequence of small town living, instead of the law, Big Karl called my kin on account of my antics.

Before my passive and weary view had come dances, lap and otherwise, drinks a plenty, three near-brawls, and half the dancers in the joint slapping my face. Into dulled ears had come the echo of my voice, gone dark and gravely, uttering all manner of filth.

From a dark corner, I watched it all: mute, numb, and powerless.

“Billy,” came the call, uttered in false confidence bordering on bluster, “Time ta be gettin home now, ya hear.”

Laughter answered him in mocking rolls.

“Billy,” he said, all stern and serious-like, but he stopped there. His eyes locked with mine. That angel’s face of his screwed up like I hadn’t ever seen before. I felt my own face twist and sneer. The view before me didn’t waver, just rested locked and steady on his face as it fell with dark realization.

My brother may have been sweet as Summer molasses, but he wasn’t dense, no sir.

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  1. Avatar Jae

    Still in that state of uncontrol. The voice of the character whose body has been taken sounds resigned in this story, like he’s accepted the fact that there’s nothing he can do.

  2. Avatar Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

    i love the image that you created with the speaker removed from the action on the surface, separated by some tranquil barrier.

  3. Avatar Krulltar

    I’ve read the 3 stories in this series several times since you published the 1st one. I wasn’t sure how to comment. heck, I’ve batted around a sequel for the first story in this series for a couple of weeks now, maybe one day my muses will focus and I’ll actually put my thoughts and feelings into a sequel, but I’m getting off point…

    This is a deeply insightful story that has a wonderful southern feel to it. The two brother character’s have depth, and you capture the nuances of a small town…all of which is hard to pull off in such a small space like ficly.

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