You're Beautiful

Avatar Author: Charlie K Charlie K was a single celled organism who had grown on the side of a test tube in an alchemist’s laboratory. His life was a simple one, and Charlie was not happy with it at all. One day the Sultan summoned the famous al... Read Bio

“You’re beautiful.”

“No, I’m not. At my best, I’m moderately good-looking,” she said with a smile.

He leaned over and kissed her.

“You’re beautiful,” he repeated.

“Fine, I’m beautiful, but I didn’t say you could kiss me.”

“You don’t have to. We’re married now, which means I can kiss you anytime I want,” he said.

“Where does it say that?” she asked.

“It’s in the contract. Didn’t you read the contract?”

She shoved him playfully. “Read the contract? I wrote that thing, and it said nothing about you kissing me.”

“I made some revisions when you weren’t looking,” he said.

“Well, if you can kiss me, then I can kiss you,” she said as she leaned in…

He woke up.

He looked around at his empty bed and his dirty bedroom. He scratched the scruffy beard that had been present since that day.

He sat on the edge of the bed and stared at the urn on top of the dresser. He stared at that urn until the dawn came. And when the sunbeams hit his eyes, he wept.

He looked at her picture.

“You’re beautiful.”

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  1. Avatar Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

    I don’t think you need the “And then,” It stunts the flow a little.

    This is really beautiful though. Although I hope there wasn’t actually a contract… little paranoid.
    I love “And when the sunbeams hit his eyes, he wept.”

  2. Avatar Charlie K

    How’s that? And no, there wasn’t an actual contract, just a little joke.

  3. Avatar Music-Hearted

    This is so sad, but lovely. Nice work.

  4. Avatar Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

    ‘He woke up’ is a lot more hard-hitting and sudden.

  5. Avatar Krulltar

    beautifully sad…

  6. Avatar Charlie K

    Thanks, guys

  7. Avatar Horrorfan13

    I certainly didn’t expect that she was gone. I like the jarring of when he woke up, like we all are being woken up to the fact of her being gone. And yes, the line about the sunbeams and him weeping is amazing.

  8. Avatar Mr. Reeses

    Awwww… that was so romantic and sad at the same time. You drew me in, and unexpectedly it was over. It caught me off guard, Great job.

  9. Avatar Charlie K

    Thank you!

  10. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    whoa.. the “since that day” threw me at first, but as I kept reading I realized this was much much less mushy and more heart wrenching.

  11. Avatar Charlie K

    Thanks, Elsha!

  12. Avatar Marli

    Can only reiterate what others have said. Good work Charlie K.

  13. Avatar Charlie K

    Thank you, Marli.

  14. Avatar Lady Venuquin

    This is lovely. Beautiful and sad. Well done.

  15. Avatar Charlie K

    Thank you

  16. Avatar Lighty

    The transition from dream to reality: unexpected and well done. The beginning is gently and the feeling is carried through while having a complete change in tone, impressive.
    Lovely but so sad.

  17. Avatar Mostly Harmless

    How on Earth has this not been featured?

    This is some stunning work Charlie – I was living it enough when it was a simple but beautifully written romance – but the lurch into a tragic reality?

    Elegantly handled and hauntingly heartbreaking – MH.

  18. Avatar Charlie K

    Trust me, MH, I want this featured as much as you do! I have had one featured story in my time on Ficly, and it wasn’t even one I was particularly proud of. The gods of Ficly can be cruel.

    But, thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed it! Or had your heart broken by it. Whichever works best.

  19. Avatar code dreamboat

    everyone else has said, but great piece, heart breaking and hauntingly familiar

  20. Avatar Charlie K

    I’m so glad all of you liked this. Thanks!

  21. Avatar Tad Winslow

    Yeah, I liked it to. I agree with all of the positive comments above.