Golden Knobs

Avatar Author: quipsofthequill I am just a student, wishing for my big break. I am a tiny dancer. What else do you have to know? I am an actor. "I love acting. It is so much more real than life." I am a singer. "But I have a talent, a wonderful t... Read Bio

The wind whistles in-between my empty fingers. I run my hands through my hair, which has turned an astonishing shade of auburn. The leaves of the trees above me glisten and crack against the trunk, and suddenly they are all falling down, on top of me, pressing down on my chest. I can’t breathe.

I’m running down an empty hallway, door after door staring at me with accusatory eyes. I feel a feverish need to open a door, to empty myself into a room, but none of the doors catch me in quite the right way.

A deep mahogany one looms in front of me, its golden knob swiveling side to side, enticing me. I stretch my fingers out. I am so close. I slide open the door and step lightly and quickly into the room.

He’s there.

His eyebrows twitch up, as if saying, ‘Now what?’ I leap through him, through his irises, onto the sand. The ocean laps at my toes, like a dog. The tide goes in and out… lap, lap…

I’m shocked awake. I look down at my Jack Russell and sigh. Now I’ll never know what was supposed to come next…

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  1. Avatar Mostly Harmless

    Some interesting dream scenarios here that make this an interesting read – but where it really works well is in capturing that place where dreams and reality overlap, in the seconds before waking, when something real comes into the situation!

    Felt very believable, and I think it was important that the dreams were the real point of the story, rather than using a cliffhanger upon waking for dramatic effect.

    Good work – MH :)

  2. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Definitely know that feeling at the end of a dream, wondering what was going to come next. First paragraph felt a bit shaky, or clunky maybe, somewhere in sentence length or structure. Not a big deal, just something to work on.

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