Locked Away

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Alisa had been locked in this room for days.

There was a simple door in the wall, but noone had entered or egressed since she awoke in this place. One minute she’d lain down to catch a good night’s sleep, and when she woke refreshed and ready to tackle the new day, she had found nothing to tackle.

Not that she didn’t try, of course. She’d thrown her weight against the door and every other wall a number of times, but all she had to show of it was a series of bruises. She was starting to get weary from lack of food, though she’d managed to coax some water from a nozzle on one of the walls.

She looked at the nozzle once again. A button atop a simple angled nozzle. She’d peered at it from every angle, pulled it, hit it, yelled at it. Nothing. Aside from the door, it was the only feature in the room, and her only hope.

With her last ounce of strength she gave it a twist and was rewarded with a jolt of electricity, rendering her once more unconscious.

She could only hope she’d wake up again in her own bedroom.

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Comments (3 so far!)

  1. Avatar Foolhearted

    hehe a shocking twist. I have to admit, I didn’t see it coming.

  2. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    It’s a really nicely rendered scene and a nice start to a harrowing story. I don’t know if I’d call it a twist so much as more bad news after lots of bad news upon waking.

  3. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    well it was a twist of the wrist….

    I thought maybe she was like a mouse in a cage and had to learn to get drink or food by pushing a button. behavior conditioning experiment..

    but it wasn’t a twist of a story, because I was looking for a twist that didn’t come. Not that it made the story any less great, no, it’s still a good beginning.

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