The Bite of Pain

Avatar Author: Cally Beck I am a twenty-three year old third-year law student at the University of Baltimore. I am also one of the lead developers for Lithmeria, a MUD currently in beta-testing. In college, I majored in philosophy and minored in r... Read Bio

The moon illuminated my path through the graveyard as I walked behind the woman who had made me a vampire. We were both silent for much of the way, a fragile truce that agreed to keep the obvious unspoken.

I wasn’t capable of deliberately doing myself in, dead or alive or undead or whatever I was. I still felt like me, except…

Was that adrenaline putting that impatient bounce in my step? I ran my tongue over my teeth, hoping the bite of pain would grant me a little more control. It was a struggle to keep from rushing past my guide, in search of—what?

Fangs. I should have expected them, but they hadn’t been there when I first checked, in those beginning seconds of my new existence.

“What is happening to me?” I demanded as we passed through the gates.

She glanced back. “You hunger,” she said, as though my swollen teeth and burgeoning need could be solved by a simple trip through the drive-through.

“Am I supposed to kill anyone?” I asked, reconsidering a dawn suicide.

“Do you want to?” She smiled.

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  1. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    Interesting that adrenaline is the hormone of dominance for hungering now that a traditional diet is not necessary. Hadn’t considered that before.

  2. Avatar Jae

    This entire series has been gripping to read. Lots of hard questions and ambiguous answers.

    I can’t help but relate it to Twilight, but only to say that this has been a much deeper, better read than all four books combined.

  3. Avatar Klaus Consine

    no, this is far from twilight, really far
    i wish that is also far from anne rice

    anyway, good work cally! keep writing =)

  4. Avatar JayDee

    “A Dawn Suicide.”

    Sounds like a good name for a band!

    Great stuff, Cally, as always!

  5. Avatar Cally Beck

    Thanks, everyone :) hopefully somebody comes up with a sequel—this series has been a lot of fun so far!

  6. Avatar Kat Peters

    Really enjoyed the insights… always nice to hear a vamp’s perspective as they are changing..

  7. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    I really liked the last line there. It’s a nice addition, carefully paced to create and use the moment. Nice job.

  8. Avatar Luke Nicolaou

    Actually, I don’t know how many of you have seen or heard about it, but this whole series follows a lot of major plot points from the Aussie Vampire film “Daybreakers.” Damned good film if I do say so, and I am definitely drawing some parallels.

    I’m just glad we’re not talking Twilight :D

  9. Avatar Cally Beck

    I did see Daybreakers but I’m afraid I don’t see the similarities. But then, I didn’t see the similarities with Twilight, either.

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