The Hole

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The presence of the hole didn’t take me by surprise; I had wandered through these woods daily for the past seven years and watched it slowly being carved through the earth. It was just a divot at first, really, and was simple to ignore. With each day though, it became a little deeper, wider, and more demanding that I notice it. As the hole expanded, I watched the once pristine forest change around me. Sadness, fear, and confusion gripped me as the tall, sturdy trees morphed into hideous gray forms. Their trunks twisted and slumped while their limbs tangled into webs that blocked out light and made side trails dangerous, if not impossible, to traverse. The air had long since soured and the myriad of birds’ songs had silenced. There was only this one path now, that led to this ever deepening, widening hole. I found myself gazing into it more often, until this morning when I finally ventured into it. I took one last look at the polluted, grotesque woods and slowly slipped off toward oblivion.

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  1. Avatar Kat Peters

    Wow, I love this story! I like how you literally get sucked in or should I say… I slipped into your story as I read it!! Very nice!

  2. Avatar Kihd

    What a coincidence! For the past seven years, I have watched trees in the woods I live next to succumb to the same fate, either from tree hauler guys or the dicks down the road. I have nearly the same feeling as the character too. Weeeeird…
    If I get some time I might take a whack at a sequel. :)

  3. Avatar Holly K

    Thanks for the kind feedback :) Kihd, I’d love to read a sequel if you can get to it.

  4. Avatar Slightnmighty

    This is beautifully flowing, even if it’s sad. I like the mystery you’ve imbued and how she’s just tugged in.

  5. Avatar Eckhouse

    The only thing I’m left wanting after reading is more of a sense of The Narrator – something easily assuaged with a sequel. The idea of a growing hole in the forest is a very cool setup.

  6. Avatar Luke Nicolaou

    If you stare into the abyss long enough, the abyss stares into you :D

    Brilliant!

  7. Avatar JayDee

    I liked it a lot! There’s a real sense of innocence and helplessness in the protagonist, and the story is intriguing. At first I thought it was all a metaphor for deforestation, but now I’m not so sure…

    Only one thing I could mention: if you broke it into paragraphs, it could give the development of the story more definition. But that’s only my personal opinion.

    Anyway, I look forward to seeing it develop if any sequels are on their way!

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