Vampire Wars

Avatar Author: Bob Liddil I am an author of science fiction, general fiction short stories, poetry, and non-fiction. I have been published in several genres, including fantasy and poetry, as well as non fiction. At one time I published my own c... Read Bio

Vladimir Constantinescu kept his back to the wall behind the farthest corner table in the tavern from the door. This table was also the most poorly lit, being afforded only one small candle, rather than a lamp as were those more centrally adjacent to the long polished bar that dominated the room. But then, Vladimir, by his very nature was a kinsman to the dark and this arrangement was in fact, exactly how he liked it.

Vladimir was a gentleman of means. Of that there could be no doubt. The richness of his cloak, the manner in which he bore himself, all bespoke of wealth, of power and of importance. Yet despite all that outward grandeur, Vladimir chose to inhabit this particular tavern, which was neither an effete establishment catering to a wealthy few, nor was it a raucous bawdy house jangling to poorly tuned piano music and prowling ladies of the evening. It was simply a safe and quiet place where someone might enjoy his bere in comfort and seclusion – or a meeting with someone very dangerous indeed.
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  1. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    I could swear I’ve seen that last name before somewhere.
    Okay, granted I’m in a pissy mood, but I’m not liking fragments today. The second “sentence” in the second paragraph could just as easily be a clause set off by no more than a comma. I also think the last sentence in the first paragraph could do without the ‘But then…’ beginning, but I am in a nitpicky mood.
    Good atmosphere and mood to it, and I like the ending with a hint towards conflict and danger.

  2. Avatar Tina Murphy

    I agree, good atmosphere but wasn’t hooked by the HINT of danger at the end. For a begining, reads more like part of the first chapter. I do like using historical figures as the basis for a character in a vampire book. It expands our horizons in regards to the possibilities of a famous figure.

    @THX, Vladimir Constantinescu (born 1895, died 1965) was a Romanian Major-General during World War II. Also sounds close to the “original” Dracula.

  3. Avatar Bob Liddil

    http://ficly.com/stories/11384 is the ficly in which Vladimir Constantinescu first appeared. Reading that ficly more overtly reveals my mindset in creating the current story.

    “. . .write the opening to a novel. It can be as short as a sentence or as long as the full 1024.”

    I tried to stay as close as possible to the instruction that the entry would be the first sentences in the entire novel. With that in mind, I chose atmosphere over action in order to forge a curiousity in the reader as to “who” Vlad might be, “what” might be his mission or purpose within the context of the book, “where” the book is set, “when” as in what segment of the historical time line, and “why” his story in particular was being told.

    Trying to accomplish all that in 1024 characters was a fool’s errand, however Tina nailed it and THX suspected it, that this gently introduced ficly protagonist is indeed a vampire.

    Now – heel or babyface?

  4. Avatar Tina Murphy

    Bob, Thanks for the breakdown of your thought process! I could see what you were going for. Guess I don’t get subtle. For the begining of a book I like to be hit over the head with action. THEN lulled by description and the exciting build up of hints to whats coming.
    I did check out your previous ficly with Vlad in it and liked that because it moved along and left you hanging.

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