The Underground Secret

Avatar Author: Bob Liddil I am an author of science fiction, general fiction short stories, poetry, and non-fiction. I have been published in several genres, including fantasy and poetry, as well as non fiction. At one time I published my own c... Read Bio

“I’m not going in there,” I said, staring dubiusly at a cave entrance, partially hidden by a waterfall. Sam had brought me and Larry and Pete here to the piney woods grove behind the funeral home on Divine Street.

“There’s nothing to be afraid of,” Tim protested. “And plenty to see,” he added.

Reluctantly I followed, bringing up the rear and getting wet when we passed under the waterfall.

The inside of the cave glowed with an eerie green light all the way up to a steel door at the end of a long hall. Tim put his hand up against a little window and a light flashed, then a robotic voice said, “You may enter.”

The room beyond the door had one wall of flashing lights and switches. It looked like a movie computer. As I stepped in, the door slid shut behind me.

Tim said, “You are all my prisoners.” He peeled off his face and skin to reveal that he was an alien underneath.

I said, “I don’t think so, Tim.” I pulled out my slingshot and shot him in the head.

We never told anybody about our secret.

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Comments (5 so far!)

  1. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    haha, told in a childlike manner, quick, to the point, and wildly creative.

  2. Avatar Bob Liddil

    This story is a ficly recreation of a 25 handwritten (on notebook paper) page story I turned in for extra credit in fifth grade to Miss Brooks at Schneider Elementary School.

    She was impressed and took me downstairs to read it to a sixth grade english class. That afternoon, two sixth graders beat me up on the way home from school, presumably for being a wise guy.

    I subsequently declined all future read-alouds outside my own classroom. :)

  3. Avatar Sir Bic

    ROFL – literally – I just got back in my chair!

    This is absolutely beautiful! The ingenuousness of youth inspires the greatest of writers.
    I loved the slingshot solution at the end. Plus, your commentary is priceless.

    Great stuff! []o)

  4. Avatar Kihd

    I agree with nagi, fantastic imagination! Haha. Reminded me of those old cartoons where the character pulls random stuff out of their seemingly not-there-three-seconds-ago pocket. Very funny! Thanks for participating.

  5. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    @Bob, aww that’s a terrible ending to have had for a writing experience!
    Notetoself, read challenge before commenting. ;)

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