Young Master Tompkins

Avatar Author: OrangeOreos (LoA) So I figure I should fill this box in, because otherwise my profile page promised to cry in despair. The name's Orange, OrangeOreos. I'm from a now-extinct organization known as Ficlets. I haven't written much since th... Read Bio

Young Master Tompkins peeked out from the garden hedges at the edge of the street to watch a flustered Mr. Maxwell rush by. He quickly hid his head back underneath the bush, but it was too late.


Tompkins cautiously stuck his head out from underneath the shrub and looked at Max, answering with a shaking voice, “Ye-, yes sir?”

“What is a boy like you doing under there!? Come out from there this instant!” Maxwell yelled. Tompkins immediately tumbled out from the plant and staggered to his feet, doing anything in his power to avoid a conversation with Master Maxwell. He was frightening!

“I’ll be going now, sir…” Tompkins muttered, while swerving quickly around the hedge.

But an arm stopped him and pulled him back. “You’re almost 10 now, Tompkins! And you’re still playing your childish games! It’s time to grow up a little! Take control of yourself!” Tompkins shivered and avoided Max’s furious eyes. “But now that you’re here, you might as well help me. I have an errand for you…”

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Comments (5 so far!)

  1. Avatar Elisabeth L. Davis(LoA)

    Ooh, cliffhanger. Can’t wait for a sequel![driveby or puppy eyes comment?]

  2. Avatar g²LaPianistaIrlandesa

    Only thing I have to nit-pick: the first time Max is referenced he’s called “Sir.” That doesn’t quite sit well with me, personally.
    Other than that, we gots to wing it from here… yay winging it!

  3. Avatar OrangeOreos (LoA)

    Hmmm… I see where you’re coming from, Gwen. I guess it doesn’t really work the way I wanted it to. changes

  4. Avatar g²LaPianistaIrlandesa

    I don’t think here’s a good place for the house’s description, like we were thinking. I’m going to take this opportunity to tag and ask you to sequel… pretty please? =D

  5. Avatar g²LaPianistaIrlandesa

    So, what d’y’reckon, Orange: d’y’think I could’ve taken longer for me to sequel?

    Now that I say that, it probably could’ve…

    Anywho, you’re it! ^^

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