Come Fly with Me

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The man stepped his foot out of the craft, slowly descending to the solid, yet dusty grey ground. With the jolt of his foot, an indentation, and then a puff of dirt.

He raises his eyes towards the distance, amazed, yet frightened. As he takes another breath, he begins the slow walk, eyes fixed towards an unknown object in the distance. He thinks to himself all the possibilities, all the faults, all the years of science, research, history, shattered.

He continues walking, battling the forces he’s not used to, trying to keep a straight line. His radio buzzes, he doesn’t understand the words. Foot caught on a rock, he tumbles toward the hard grey surface, the gravity slowing his fall to a snail’s pace. The light impact feeling as though it breaks ever bone in his body.

As he gets up, the radio chips in again, sending shock waves of pain through his head.

He opens his eyes again, close enough for a clear view.

In the distance, a colorful, mysterious banner. Riddled with blue, red, and white.

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  1. Avatar 32 ^2

    Wonderful, your ending surprised me. I would like to suggest a couple changes: He thinks to himself all the possibilities, all the faults, all the years of science, research, history, shattered. could be reworked along the lines of: He thinks of all the shattered scientific possibilities, faults, research, history (that brought him here). And chips to chirps?

    I love how you are able to use a few words to explain so much of what’s going on, Your line he doesn’t understand the words frightened me, like a person lost in a foreign country, this guy is on a foreign grey planet, and doesn’t understand a word being spoken.

    This is totally prequel /sequel material!

  2. Avatar smdasilva {LoA}

    I also liked this.

    One edit, last line of the 3rd paragraph should be every bone.

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