They Came to Take Me Away

Avatar Author: Sam Ervin The pen is mightier than the sword. How outdated. In the 1900's, it would have been, "The typewriter is mightier than the machine gun." But in modern times? "The word processor is mightier than the particle-beam weapon." ... Read Bio

They’re going to take me away.

They’re going to take me away.

I knew they would do it, and I went and blew it.

I boned it, screwed up, shut down, blew up, hosed it, lost it, botched it, broke it.

They want me there.

Away from here. I can’t do it.

I must escape. Leave, exit, jump ship, sail off, fly away. All my transportation is blocked.

It’s all gone. All gone. All of it. Zip. Zero. Zilch. Nada. The Big Freeze. It’s out, out like a fat guy with a bunt to the pitcher.

They’re going to take me, take me away. I’m leaving soon. Very soon. They want me. I don’t want them. I just want them out. Out of here, out of there, out of everywhere.

I can’t leave. They’re closer, now. Closing in on the final point. The final stretch. The final countdown. The final capture, the last of the last of the last.

They’ve nearly got me. I can’t escape. I can’t delay. I have to act.

Perhaps, just maybe, possibly, I could slip by…

… oh dear! They’ve got me! I can’t leave! I’ve much to do!

They came to take me away!

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  1. Avatar Sam Ervin

    Yearrrg.

    I don’t much like it.

  2. Amj Lone Writer

    You don’t like it, I however do. I think out of everything I’ve read today this is one of my favorites.

    I can’t leave. They’re closer, now. Closing in on the final point. The final stretch. The final countdown. The final capture, the last of the last of the last.

    Those are great lines, I would love it if you wrote more. Please? For me? :D

  3. Avatar Sam Ervin

    A sequel? Shee-oot. I’ll see what I can whip up. Thanks for the positive comments.

    I rather like the redundancies in this story.

  4. Avatar g²LaPianistaIrlandesa

    The redundancies drive home the urgency in this piece. Very tense, very fast-paced… I’m curious to see what goes down!

  5. Avatar Sam Ervin

    Looking back, the “out like a fat guy” line really doesn’t gel with the rest of the piece. But I’m not sure how to change it, ending the line with The Big Freeze feels weird.

  6. Avatar Tay

    It sounds a lot like Holocaust pieces. Except the end kind of reminds me of Shel Silverstein’s Boa Constrictor.

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