Unbeing

Avatar Author: Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA)) "If people never did silly things, nothing intelligent would ever get done." --Ludwig Wittgenstein My name is Wednesday, and I guess you could say that for the most part that quote personifies me. If there were no sil... Read Bio

What if I were just
a girl,
I’d wish that.
wish my life away without
much care for underworld
or hell or He.
I’d cut my wrists
dye my hair
let the blood slip through
fingers cold
and show off scars to my friends
as if it was a proud thing,
as if it meant nothing.

What if I were just
a ghost,
I’d wish that.
having wished my life away
without much thought for that beyond boys
and curls and makeup.
I’d whisp through scenes
scream my all
let the blood slip through
fingers cold
and wander the earth unnoticed
as if it were an old thing
as if it meant nothing.

What if I were just
a child,
I’d wish that.
wish my childhood away
without much thought for the future
or jobs or astronauts.
I’d not know of underworld
play all day
unreminded of blood
or fingers cold
and bless each face with a smile
as if it were a new thing
as if it meant nothing.

What if I were just
happy,
I’d wish that.
Wish away my life
because unbeing dead
is not being alive
and all I can do
as now
is unbe.

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  1. Avatar Abby (LoA)

    Wow. Another of your pieces that has completely blown me away. This is beautifully tragic, confusing and full of supressed pain. Great structure and repetition and language and just everything!! Second to last paragraph was my absolute favourite.

    To me…this is true poetry.
    Abby x

  2. Avatar Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

    Oh wow thanks stars in my eyes 8_8 big tears of joy <3

  3. Avatar August 2nd

    Free verse is usually of little interest to me and I rarely read it. However, I read this piece and I must say, PJ, I think it’s quite good. There’s only one thing that I can’t make sense of, and that’s the period that ends the third line of each stanza. It seems to make a non-grammatical sentence of the first three lines. Would you explain?

  4. Avatar Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

    Explain… It just felt right. Wishy-washy though that answer is… Maybe I’ll look at it in the morning and think it wrong but it’s still fresh at this point.
    But I’m glad I made something you usually don’t like into something to please you August.

  5. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    oh the throes of depression and apathy, woe, woe is me! Very well done, without being too dark because the ultimate wish is simple happiness. 5 pencils

  6. Avatar Reaver19

    hell yeah i agree with what is being said about this entry. nice contrast and emotion throughout PJ. i really find it hard to NOT enjoy your poetry.

  7. Avatar The Fantastic Mister Fish

    i’m not a very good critic
    i can only put things i dislike into words
    that being said, i have nothing to say

  8. Avatar Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

    Th-thank you :)