I See You.

Avatar Author: Infinity. “Fate is like gravity. You can jump up and down until your heart’s content, but the earth still falls into the sun, and the sun still courses through the galaxy, both indifferent to your short-lived and insignificant defi... Read Bio

I can see them in the mirrors. They hover behind me.
Their faces are smeared with blood, they weep blood with their empty holes for eyes.
They tear their hair out, pulling out their scalp and leaving tracks of it on the floor.

I can’t sleep, I see them.
They beckon me to them as they drip blood from their fingers. Their nails looking more like claws. I stand and watch them from afar.
They approach at a walk, then begin to run. Before they reach me they dissolve to ash. Their remains speck in my corneas and I wake up, eyes burning.

I only reject food; it is repulsive. I hunger for escape.

And then there’s my reflection.
Exhausted, starving, and dead.
The girls are obediently behind me.
I look at my hands; unkept.
I touch my face, and try to see the woman I was. No luck, I am not her.
I cry and begin to dig my face.
I close my eyes and scrape away.
I feel the blood pool in my nails and when my eyelids open, I molest my open wounds.
I see nothing. I feel no pain.
But I weep blood.
I am you now.

At last.

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  1. Avatar Reaver19

    Nice entry. It’s subtly haunting and dark. Very much like a horror movie that would leave you on the edge of your seat the whole time.

  2. Avatar Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

    Hardly subtle, but I like it. Creepy, dark, simple.

    A few technical points:
    (Yes, I am that person.)

    1. I only reject food, it is repulsive. I hunger for escape.
    2. I feel the blood pool in my nails and when my eyelids open, I molest my open wounds.
    3. I see nothing, I feel no pain.
    The grammar in these lines is wonky. That comma should either be a full stop or a semi colon. It sends my brain off kilter. I know you want it all in one sentence but it would still feel cohesive seperated by a colon of some sort.

    The girls are diligently behind me.
    You can’t be diligently. Also diligently is a weird word. It doesn’t match its surroundings.

    Other than that I think it’s brilliant. The feel of the piece is fantastic. And it’s stuck between poetry and prose, much like the protag is stuck between two people, two minds.

  3. Avatar musicgirl

    creepiest entry i’ve read so far. great job

  4. Avatar LinKerralSanar

    This creeped the hell out of me. I keep having to check behind me.

    Maybe I’ll leave the light on tonight…