Very twisted, the portrait of the faulty logic of a young sociopath. He is not going to have a very healthy future. The character voice works for the most part. Some run-ons and missing commas, but with the accented speech it’s hard to really call that stuff out. Accent work tends to work best when done with as much subtlety and as minimally as possible to still give the flavor. Can’t say exactly where this falls, but I thought it worth mentioning since it’s some of the better advice I’ve gotten over the years.
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