Holding the Wind (Tanka)

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Your love is but need

To hold you is to hold wind

Beauty, force, and cold

No returned embrace but sting

Your need eternal

I can’t hold your gale

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  1. Avatar blusparrow (LoA)

    I do not think you are a smart*** for this sequel. I like it a lot, it is a twist on my original poem. Very cool, five pencils.

  2. Avatar Blossom Roquen

    I love it so very much..
    I don’t know if you did it on purpose, but your line length is 5, 7, 5, 7, 5, 5 which really gives power to your poem.
    It’s like a double-decker Haiku!! .

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My love, stay with me Hold me through the stormy night, Chase away my fears.

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