Going to be a Long Apology

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Senior Cochon folded his arms across his dour, gray suit. His eyes peeked out sternly from beneath the brim of his hat while his mouth twitch uneasily beneath the heavy mustache. Luis fidgeted in place, letting each foot take a turn kicking the other. This was not going to be good.

“You boys,” the man started, only to stop again, as he had been doing for the last ten minutes.

Juacinto spoke up, “It was only a bit of fun…”

“Bit of fun?” the older man barked. It was the most emotion he’d shown so far. “You boys tease my daughter like that, send her off crying into the woods on All Hallow’s Eve, and you call it a bit of fun?”

Juacinto had no rejoinder. Luis dared to cast his eyes towards the darkening forest. He’d heard the tales; the town was rife with them. They were not pleasant stories.

Quieted but resolute, the old man adjusted his hat, “Fine. We go. You and you, funny boys, you will come with me. We shall fetch her from the forest.”

Luis swallowed hard. Juacinto shuddered.

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  1. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Just wanted to write something, so I went trolling through Flickr and found a picture to use. It starts with this http://www.flickr.com/photos/library_of_congress/3640758097/ and just goes from there as stuff popped into my head. Not my best, but it ain’t my worst either.

  2. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    i think the punishment fits the crime.. had a hard time picturing the man in this, until i saw the photo. I think the setting is lacking, i mean we see the dark (all hallow’s eve), the woods, and we assume the boys came to her father to ‘fess up, but he was wearing a hat, so he must have been outside, not home relaxing. That’s why it feels awkward to me. (there’s my ramble)

  3. Avatar jesteram

    I was picturing a sheriff, until I remembered the gray suit. But he definitely had the mustache.

  4. Avatar Reiko516

    Nice! Their fear is conveyed really well, makes me wonder what this forest is like and what they’ll find in there. Great names too. I always have a hard time coming up with names.