Blood

Avatar Author: Abby Wall (LoA) 17 year old attempting to juggle my beloved writing and A-Levels. Please be gentle =) Thought it might be time to write a proper profile piece. I'm...er...Abby. And...well...that's me there. Somewhere to the...erm...left ... Read Bio

I cut a chunk of flesh out of
My arm the other day.
It hurt a little, bled a lot
Then softly crept away

Into a weeping, empty pit
Of nothing but despair -
A sacred jewel of pearly pink,
An eye alone to stare.

I thought that I would check how sharp
My scissors really are,
Just rest them slowly on my skin -
It won’t go very far.

I sterilised the scissor blades
Above a candle flame.
I guess that lilac, lily love
Can’t help you in this game.

It’s only blood. And blood on blood.
And blood on god-damned blood.
When all the light of winter’s gone
The snow will leave for mud.

All the frost and memories of the
Past year will depart,
And I’ll be left here breaking with
A slowly breaking heart.

I never thought that it would be
My fate to die alone.
I guess that’s life – a chunk of flesh
And a long-lost-never-known.

So I’m left here in the darkness
With scissors and with pain.
Somehow I never thought that I’d
Be lost to blood again.

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  1. Avatar Tad Winslow

    Wow.

  2. Avatar In Night's Arms

    I agree. Wow.
    I would hope this was just a poem and not a reflection of something you struggle with.

  3. Avatar The Ghost in the Machine LoA

    This is very powerful stuff here but I really hope this isn’t a reflection of something that happened to you or something you’re working through. Cutting isn’t something to be taken lightly

  4. Avatar Infinity.

    Abby – simply amazing.

    I used to have a problem like this (but not taking out my flesh…) and it’s nothing easy to overcome. This was intense and real and reflected how sad things like this are. It shouldn’t be taken lightly but it does happen and it’s inevitable. People always feel alone and sad but it takes a true someone to realize that they aren’t and that people care.

    Whether this is a reflection or not, we all care about you here on ficly and you are appreciated!!

    Muchhh love!

  5. Avatar fish

    so many great lines in this poem…
    the third and fourth stanzas just made it for me.
    also the lines “I guess that’s life – a chunk of flesh/And a long-lost-never-known.”

    I wish my criticism was more than me pointing out my favorite lines, but that’s the best I can do. Brilliant.

  6. Avatar fish

    so many great lines in this poem…
    the third and fourth stanzas just made it for me.
    also the lines “I guess that’s life – a chunk of flesh/And a long-lost-never-known.”

    I wish my criticism was more than me pointing out my favorite lines, but that’s the best I can do. Brilliant.

  7. Avatar Luca

    each cut,
    each scar,
    each burn.
    a different mood or time.

  8. Avatar Iris...Alone

    this is amazing; i hope that i can one day write about such sorrow with scuh ease and beauty that u have. this is a great poem.

  9. Avatar Iris...Alone

    this is amazing; i hope that i can one day write about such sorrow with scuh ease and beauty that u have. this is a great poem.

  10. Avatar Iris...Alone

    this is amazing; i hope that i can one day write about such sorrow with scuh ease and beauty that u have. this is a great poem.

  11. Avatar Iris...Alone

    this is amazing; i hope that i can one day write about such sorrow with scuh ease and beauty that u have. this is a great poem.

  12. Avatar Iris...Alone

    this is amazing; i hope that i can one day write about such sorrow with scuh ease and beauty that u have. this is a great poem.

  13. Avatar Iris...Alone

    this is amazing; i hope that i can one day write about such sorrow with scuh ease and beauty that u have. this is a great poem.

  14. Avatar Iris...Alone

    this is amazing; i hope that i can one day write about such sorrow with scuh ease and beauty that u have. this is a great poem.

  15. Avatar Kihd

    This makes me want to attack home row with whimsy. asldkfjashlk;aj

    I also hope that this isn’t something you’re going through. But even if it is, writing it out will be an even better catharsis than cutting. :)

    My only criticism is that the word “breaking” gets a bit redundant in the sixth stanza.
    Still though. Shazam.

  16. Avatar 32 ^2

    I’m searching for a needle and thread, I’ll be right over…

  17. Avatar Abby Wall (LoA)

    Thank-you everyone for your comments and input. This is a problem for me, but not to a point of danger. I will get round to commenting on all of your latest works. My excuse for the moment is excess physics work.

    Nevertheless, your sentiments are very much appreciated =)
    Abby x

  18. Avatar Nickel

    The imagery is striking and cuts deep, and there’s a haunting sort of melody to it. Absolutely stunning.

  19. Avatar OpenSkies

    The sixth stanza is by far my favorite. “And I’ll be left here breaking with a slowly breaking heart”
    That’s a great line. I love it.

  20. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Arrrg, not a cutting poem. Sorry, but it’s just such an unhealthy thing that too many people try to glorify. I don’t think that’s what you were doing here, but I could really make it through the poem cause of the content—my issue, not yours.

  21. Avatar Funky Chunky

    Ouch. I’m practically speechless. It’s beautiful, poignant, painful. I pray you come to terms with your pain, as I pray I do with mine.

  22. Avatar ~Eagle~My~Beagle

    Excellent control of the language. Stunning. Agreed that the theme is uncomfortable; however, what we write about is often dark, or troubling, or hard to accept.