Typical Monday Night

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“Hey baby?”
“Hmm?”
“What should we do tonight?”
“Iuno.”
“Hmm. Want to go to the mall later?”
“Hunh.”
“Or we could go to the movies. There is that new movie out I wanted to see! Should I call Jeanie?”
“Hunh? Uh-hunh.”
“Oooo! We could go out to dinner afterwords! What would you want to eat for dinner?”
“Iuno.”
“I bet Jeanie would want to eat at that new french restaurant that just opened! I can wear my new dress! Would you like to do that tonight sweetheart?”
“Mm. Uh-hunh.”
“I’m gonna go call Jeanie! I love you baby.”
“Uh-hunh. You too.”

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  1. Avatar Ronnie

    I wasn’t too happy with how this turned out, but it’s fairly typical of the average conversation on a Monday night during football season.

  2. Avatar dkscully

    A dialogue that’s bordering on monologue.

    I like the slightly brittle note of near desperation on the part of the poor partner abandoned for the Football.

    I do wonder, however, what might have happened if she’d asked a more controversial question – “Can I have a hundred dollars?” – or perhaps made a startling statement – “I’m pregnant” springs to mind as an obvious cliché. :-)

    Thanks for playing!

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