Orpheus

Avatar Author: Elizabeth Greene A fiction novelist of no published piece of literature except the typical school required pieces of which are boring and oh so factual. "When writing a novel, a writer should create living people; people, not character... Read Bio

He walked on as his strength ebbed from his body. He felt his arms drooping. Scared of dropping what he carried, he fell to his knees. He fought looking over his shoulder as he struggled to get back to his feet. He couldn’t drop her. He mustn’t drop her. Dropping her would be as bad, if not worse, than looking behind him. And looking back “from whence he came” was as bad as losing what was left of his soul.

He continued walking forward through the cold and damp tunnel.

Just a bit farther ’til the end. He was almost there.

The whispering voices behind him grew louder.
Orpheus, Orpheus,” they whispered on.

They mustn’t distract him. He will get out with her. He looked down at his prize.

Orpheus, Orpheus

He looked over his shoulder at a ghastly being. The cave had become much damper and much colder.

“Orpheus? What are you doing?”

“Umm, nothing!” He hid the sponge behind his back.

“Orpheus.” damn that cursed mother’s glare “Stop playing in the tub. It’s almost time for dinner.”

“Yes, Mom.”

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  1. Avatar mark.i.wang

    nice delivery, i like the twist at the end. what is his prize, what is the cave? well, i suppose it doesn’t matter.

  2. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    I didn’t follow the shift from imagination to reality, though I get the general idea. Nicely written, though you’ve got some mixed tenses (some sentences in present tense and some if past tense).

    Now I have to google the myth to remind myself what it’s all about.

  3. Avatar Stockholm

    Made me lol :)

  4. Avatar Funky Chunky

    Love it! You could enter this into my challenge ‘What is Life Without Thee?’: /challenges/1075 if you want.