Baby it's Cold Inside

Avatar Author: Funky Chunky *Always* feel free to write sequels or prequels to my stories. I love reading where other writers take my ideas. I was born in 1961 (old codger). I started writing for fun over Christmas 2011. I was recommended Ficly b... Read Bio

I faced north, from whence the cold wind blows; the tears streaming down my cheeks spreading the dust aside as with unbridled indifference a troop of mercenaries thrusts its way through an unruly crowd, trampling and elbowing as they go.

Never again.

Never again, I vowed inwardly. She’d hurt me for the last time. No explanation. No closure. It’s a dreadful thing to think, I know, but for me it would have been better if she’d died; or had never been. Not that I wish her dead. Oh no. Never. I love her.

That’s why I’m never going to open my heart to another woman and reveal my quirks, twists and joys. Be real and raw and clear and clean with her. I will not always be alone, but a part of me will remain mine and mine alone, hidden forever, locked in an impenetrable fortress of cold.

Never… Forever…

And then I met Jan and that changes everything…

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  1. Avatar Anna Banner

    Brilliant!! Bro!

  2. Avatar mark.i.wang

    I think you’re going for comedy with the last line, but the rest of the piece is so dark. Also the use of italics is a little odd. Unsure what purpose it serves as it’s apparently not inner dialogue? Is it emphasis?

  3. Avatar Emily

    I would disagree with mark.i.wang; I don’t think it’s supposed to be comedy, it sounds to me like a romance. Also, the only italics used is “Never again” I am a little confused as to what mark is saying because this is inner dialogue.
    If I have missed something please say so.

    By the way funky chunky, I think it’s a very good little story :)

  4. Avatar mark.i.wang

    I sequeled it as a comedy. I guess someone else could sequel it as a romance?

  5. Avatar mark.i.wang

    I sequeled it as a comedy. I guess someone else could sequel it as a romance?

  6. Avatar Ruthie

    This is wonderfully romantic :) I love the positive ending and you really have a wonderful way with words! Very beautiful.

  7. Avatar Ruthie

    This is wonderfully romantic :) I love the positive ending and you really have a wonderful way with words! Very beautiful.