One Candle For Each

Avatar Author: memento Eternal I was made, and eternal I remain. Read Bio

I stride through the hallway. It is the home of my childhood, a place I no longer live in. A small boy, maybe five, runs past me. He is being chased by another boy who looks slightly older.
I enter the living room.
It is filled with people of various ages. In the corner, a slim teenager with a dark ponytail converses intently with taller boy of similar coloring. Another two sit at the piano, taking turns playing. Their slim fingers dance across the keys, and occasionally they mark notes upon a sheet of blank musical staff. Amidst a large pile of Legos, several more children busily play, their blue eyes scraping the mess for the next piece needed.
I pass my father as he is handing a beer to the oldest, who notices me walking by.
“First?” I ask him.
He smiles. “Yeah. Cheers.”
Mother brings the candle-covered cake out and sets it on the table. We gather around, laughing and smiling. Everyone is delighted that, young and old, we have all arrived.
It is the day of my twenty-first birthday.
I am seventeen.

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  1. Avatar Jae

    I read and re-read this.
    Now I understand.
    This must be one of the most compelling standalone Ficlys I have ever read.

  2. Avatar Patroclus81

    Fabulous. As Jae said, I read it several times and learned more each time. I think that kind of writing is rare and very rewarding!

  3. Avatar Tad Winslow

    Entertaining. I think the main character is imagining her 21st birthday. I’m not sure. I am sure that this is a concentration in an easy going flow. It’s very readable and at the same time makes me think deeper than what’s presented.

    I like how their eyes scrape.

  4. Avatar Tad Winslow

    Or he/she is dead and this is happening in the afterlife. Not a sunny thought, but hey, I can’t really figure it out. I’d like to think this is a happy, healthy, fully alive 17 year old dreaming up his/her 21st b-day.

  5. Avatar Mystique

    Very well written. As everyone else mentioned, I read and re-read not the whole bit but the last two sentences! Amazing writing!

  6. Avatar Princess Binky Lemontwist (LoA)

    So confused!!!!! Hehehehe

  7. Avatar Jer Ray

    Not sure i get it, but I like it. Seems to me that one of the kids in every group is the main character. Maybe recollecting….the last line is the one confusing me.

  8. Avatar memento

    A varied range of interpretations, indeed. I was hoping the tags would well allude, but it seems not. Therefore, the summation in two words: time travel.