fly away from the flames, young ones

Avatar Author: punpun I measure self-worth with numbers. I am also an extremist llama. 18 features 0 sense currently in military service Read Bio

fly, foolish, fearful children! fly,
cast away the shackles that try to hold you down
to the ground and spread your raven wings
and think not of silly things like faith and
hope but kick up the sand -run , roar, soar
and flap your wings more but don’t look back
at the children who lack your beautiful wings,
young kings who watch with hollow eyes ‘til the flame
makes them all the same: piles of crying ashes
piles of laughing sashes and piles of smiling bone -
there’s nothing left to see, fly home, young ones!
fly away from the flames, oh young ones of the night, fly!
take flight and soar into the boundless night sky, the endless velvet!

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  1. Avatar punpun

    hey guys

    I wrote this some time ago and just wanted some feedback if possible.

    also should I post more older pieces for criticism/feedback? Is that a good idea?

  2. Avatar Princess Binky Lemontwist (LoA)



    Also, I do love this poem. It has the feeling of being much deeper than the words and there is a more hidden meaning behind the words that I love in poetry. (That is the reason why I write poetry.)

    Brilliant job! Just bloody brilliant! XD
  3. Avatar Princess Binky Lemontwist (LoA)

    Love the imagery you used too, by the way. :)

  4. Avatar punpun

    really? You won’t mind?

    I have tonnes of pieces on my Tumblr, will probably port them all here.

  5. Avatar Princess Binky Lemontwist (LoA)

    You won’t get any complaints from me. :)