Stupids Bullets

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“Everyone to the ground” – Gib yelled

Mildred crouched, I bounced against the floor and closed my eyes, while involuntarily rolled over the suit’s yellow belly.

I didn’t know what was happening, but when I saw mildred’s red hands over my left wing, I knew Gib had been stupid enough to keep using the real bullets.

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  1. Avatar Princess Binky Lemontwist (LoA)

    Does the second sentence have a typo?

  2. Avatar boxofun

    I’m with Binky. The second sentence doesn’t seem to fit together. Also, in the next sentence, the comma should be after “wing”, not after “hands”. Finally, it’s “Mildred’s red hands.”

  3. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Tragic continuation. Thanks for adding a bit. I mostly followed the second sentence so maybe you corrected the typo?

  4. Avatar Laggel

    Yes, I did I corrected the typo! XD Thanks for the reviews!

    Im kind of new around here! but thanks so much for the feedbacks ;)

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