Is this a reality show? Someone once said if you can combine two different subjects successfully, then you have a basis for a story. You have done that here with Fashion meets Addiction. Somehow it manages to be both fun AND sad.

On to criticisms. the only thing of note is that in the first half, the story is in present tense and then changes to past tense in the second half. Other than that, really well done.

Fixed it!

Thank you and I suppose it could be a reality show. I just wanted to write about an ugly sweater addiction. Haha