A new start

Avatar Author: TwixGrinder I have seemed to have lost my cares to give. Have you seen them? I'm just a beginner when it comes to writing and i'm really enjoying this site. if you actually bothered to read this... Thank you. Read Bio

I looked out the window of my new family’s car. “they are finishing paper work. they’ll be right out” the man who brought me to the car said. “Ah here they come!”. Sure enough A man and a women were fast approaching. “Well good luck!”. The man said as he left. “Hi! My names David and this is my wife Kira!” My new “dad” said “we are so glad to finely have a child in our family!”. I simply stared
" whats your name sweetheart" my “mom” said. “Lucy” I said barely audible. “Nice to meet you Lucy” They both said in unison. “This will be a fresh start for all of us ok?”. I nodded what else could i do? “how old are you?” “Mom” asked. “twelve” short answers seemed best. “oh… well that`s alright well go clothes shopping tomorrow and you can go to your new school the next day!”.“Uh ok” I said.

Later i found out why i needed new clothes.

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  1. Avatar Michael Wayne LeBlanc

    This seems like a viable scene as seen from the view of a twelve-year-old.

    I don’t know if you’re open to suggestions, but if you are, let me know!

  2. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    I can feel how scared she is, delivered like a package.

  3. Avatar Princess Binky Lemontwist (LoA)

    Perhaps spacing it out a bit so the reader doesn’t get all jumbled. Overall, nice job capturing the moment. :)

  4. Avatar TwixGrinder

    thanks soooooooooo much for the nice comments!!! The second i posted this i freaked i didn’t think anyone would like it!

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