He Never Made it Home

Avatar Author: HSAR Master of the Armory and Chief Nibmaker of Our Strange and Wonderful House. It's a pleasure to meet you. Like many others in this community, I have no qualifications for writing except a head full of ideas and a passio... Read Bio

Everybody was calm, but there was an unmistakeable undercurrent of fear beneath it all. The crowd jostled, moving forward slowly. I kept tight hold of our luggage, half an eye on Nan and was having a quick glance around when I noticed a code that had etched itself into my memory, carried nonchalantly by one of the Marines close by.

SMITH 0182747

I rushed forward. He raised a hand, unrecognisable behind armour and mirrored visor.

“Sir, please stay back and remain calm.”

“Son?”

“Dad? What are you doing here?”

“It’s all been crazy. Nan’s not coping with it very well. Can you get us out of here any quicker?”

He checked the old wristwatch I’d given him long ago, the nickel plating shining in the fluorescent glare.

“It’s as crazy up there as it is down here, Dad. Just… stay calm, try to get on the first transport that arrives. I’ll find you, Dad. I promise.”

A distant klaxon sounded and he visibly flinched. He pulled down his visor hurriedly.

“I’ve got to go. Goodbye, Dad.”

“Goodbye, Son!”

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Comments (6 so far!)

  1. Avatar HSAR

    I should say that this isn’t exactly what I pictured for my death, but it was inspired by the original challenge so it seems right to enter it as an entry.

  2. Avatar Robert Quick

    Very interesting. On my first read through I thought it was science-fiction (Starship Troopers- the book not the movie) and the second and subsequent read throughs made me think modern day military instead. Sad, but at least he had one last moment with his family.

  3. Avatar LittleSecrets

    It is nice that you have captured the last moment his family saw him. Stoic as this seems, it is heartbreaking as well. Good job.

  4. Avatar JACK

    This speaks of hurried glimpses behind as well as to the future with the empathy of the unknown

  5. Avatar JACK

    So sorry hsar. My computer is sending out multiple messages. I have deleted the extraneous so on with the tales.

  6. Avatar HSAR

    I did wonder. Not a problem, though :)