Summer Heat, Warm Smiles

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Dicey lay by the pool for the umpteenth afternoon of an endless Summer. The weather, heavy with humidity and oppressively hot, was perfect for a dip. Too much neglect leading to a fuzzy green tint made the pool less than inviting all the same.

She didn’t flinch at all as a crash of breaking branches announced her neighbor’s arrival through the hedges. He crumpled, rolled, then managed a halfway convincing casual kneeling pose. Sweat, dirt, and leaves covered every inch of his young body that wasn’t covered by the tattered overalls.

“S’up, Dicey?” he drawled between gasps for breath.

She smiled and rolled her eyes behind the dime store shades, “You sho’ know how to make an entrance. Trampoline?”

“New tire swing,” he answered with a wave of his hand over his shoulder, “Lost ma’ grip.”

“I’m sho you did. Don’t suppose you want a Coke Cola, do ya’?”

He grinned, a warm and only slightly gap-toothed expression, “Don’t mind if I do, Miss Dicey.” He fetched his prize from the cooler, smile all the wider.

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Comments (3 so far!)

  1. Avatar Writearound

    Liked the use of accent to, gave it a real flavour ( pause whilst I save the English to the dictionary). It’s never easy to pull off dialogue in an accent but this managed to, well at least in this piece, sustaining it for a full length short story or novel may be trickier.
    Thought the slightly comedic entrance of the boy was great and the girl’s laid back response to it made me like her.

  2. Avatar remembrancer

    I wasn’t clear on the ages of the characters in this piece and so I wasn’t sure about what the dynamic between them was. However, I enjoyed how the accents were used to set the scene without wasting words or, in this case, characters. After all, there are so few to work with in this space.

  3. Avatar JonB

    A nice lazy, summery feel to it and likeable characters. I agree with someday_93 about the impression of easy familiarity between the two, skillfully conveyed in a few lines. A very pleasant read.

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