The Ruin of Shorelocke: The Orb

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He inspects the orb without picking it up. He can feel the memories radiating off the thing already, and he is not ready to delve into them just yet.

Unlike nearly everything else in the room, not one mote of dust rests on the orb’s surface. What’s more, a ring about an inch wide around the perimeter of the orb is also completely free of dust, as though the orb itself is actively keeping the space clear. Eifan notes this with interest. He is certain that the orb is a memory sink, filled with traumatic recollections, left here for someone to find.

Was it meant for a Chanter of Memory, such as himself? Or for someone else, someone without the ability to manage such a flood? Eifan shudders at the thought. Even for a Chanter, such a deluge would be savage. For anyone else, it would be total madness.

He reaches for the orb, then hesitates. He can already feel its resistance. He knows it does not want to be found, does not wish to be touched, to be unlocked. Perhaps it would be best to leave well enough alone.

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  1. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    Each section of this story, Eifan will be faced with a choice. It will be your job to comment on which choice he should make. The one that gets the most votes will determine which way the story goes. Clear enough? Good.

    Two choices: open the orb, or leave it be? I would also welcome any other open-ended suggestions, such as investigating other objects in the room or moving on.

  2. Avatar HSAR

    Nothing ventured, nothing gained. Open it.

  3. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    Heh, sometimes I think these choices are going to be less actual decisions and more just natural flow of the story. That’s the disadvantage to this format.

  4. Avatar Robert Quick

    Perhaps, but we can be creative and offer interesting alternatives if we want to do something different. I am not voting for anything quite yet but I am hesitant at opening the orb at the moment and would rather he carried it with him, perhaps to use as a weapon or a distraction.

  5. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    Oh, now there’s an idea I hadn’t even considered!

  6. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    I’m with Robert; save the orb for a later time.

    Great scene, very ripe with magic, drama, and possibility. Nice job fitting in exposition type stuff along with the flow of events and the character’s thoughts.

  7. Avatar Sonata Green

    Wrap the orb in a cloth, so as to carry it with him without letting it touch his skin.

  8. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    That, my dear Sonata, is almost precisely what I was thinking, as well. I’m going to try to write the next segment either today or tomorrow.

    And for what it’s worth, anyone is welcome to fork the story at any point. I’ll be continuing my own arc, of course, but if someone wants to branch it in a different direction, they’re more than welcome to have at it.

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