The Last Dance

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Elise swept around the room filling it with manufactured sighs and coy glances, though there was none left to notice her. The gown that swished around her ankles, occasionally flashing a bit of bare skin, was trimmed in jet darker than the stains in the rugs. Her face would have been slim and pretty, if not for the intense vacancy in her eyes. Her cheek and brow were as pale and blemish-free as the curve of an egg. Her head was topped with red tresses and, as she danced, they followed her like streamers.

Perspiration began to dot her head but Elise didn’t let it deter her. If anything, she doubled the intensity of her dance, as if total exhaustion was her goal. In her mind she was as focused as a laser, making sure each step, each arm movement, each breath was correct.

There was no sense in noticing all the dead men littered across the ballroom. Elise was content to dance until there were no days left. In the corner a radar beacon blinked to life and still she danced, blind to all, except the dance itself.

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  1. Avatar Drake West

    whoa creepy. What happened?

  2. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    It would be a very cool ending to an action or sci-fi movie. Cool stuff. A few grammar missteps, but generally read well and had a haunting quality to it.

  3. Avatar Robert Quick

    I’ll have to summon DB to judge my grammar for me.

  4. Avatar ethelthefrog

    Intense.

    Need a hyphen in “blemish-free” and an extra comma in “and, as she danced,”.

    I love the slow reveal here, and the grimness of the climax.

    Beautiful.

  5. Avatar JonB

    It does have a very ominous, end-of-the-road feel to it: a haunting quality, as THX says. The meaning is a bit opaque, but the feeling comes through strongly enough.

  6. Avatar Miz Em

    What they all said! I’d love to know more about how Elise ended up there all by herself.