A Curious Hairdresser

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I saw her standing on the corner of 5th street and 9th ave near Bob’s Barber Shop.I gazed upon her with wide eyes as she took a diminutive drag from her cigarette and briefly exhaled. I could tell she was perplexed by the jittery way she fidgeted. Cautiously I crossed over to the corner where she stood, and approached the fussy smoker and with utter lack of elegance and sense i took her free hand and placed upon it a soft kiss. She jerked her hand away from my puckered lips and walloped me right in the kisser, causing me to become dizzy and faint. The next thing I remember is the smell of pomegranate and tobacco and the sound of a bad Led Zeppelin cover band.

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Comments (3 so far!)

  1. Avatar ethelthefrog

    Actions have consequences. Sometimes painful ones. I like the way you are left guessing why the protagonist felt compelled to touch the smoker, and the history that would have led them to react that way.

    I feel that the sentence "Cautiously … and … and " would read better if broken into two sentences.

    Nice job.

  2. Avatar JonB

    Perhaps we’ll never know what happened in those lost moments between street corner hairdresser and pomegranite-scented Led Zeppelin tribute.

    Written in a lively and entertaining style – I like it!

  3. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    That was definitely bizarre, but kind of fun along the way.