Stay or Go?

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“Holes? No, I suspect if there were holes in this cloak there would be holes in me as well, and then we’d have a serious problem on our hands. The Princess, seen with bloodied hands tending to some brigand, no doubt. The scandal!” Dabrose wanted to warm himself by the fire, really he did, but rarely did attempts on one’s life stop after the first one, especially here.

The Princess, meanwhile, stifled a grin at Dabrose’s attempts at levity. “Good. The Captain will get a good cloak in trade. Now come on, before someone sees.”

“Sees your constant attempts to steal my cloak? Yes, that’s more scandalous than getting blood on your hands.” Dabrose strode to his horse. “Anyway I like this cloak. It’s brought me good luck.”

The Princess frowned. “You’re not leaving, are you?”

“My dear, someone just tried to shoot me with a crossbow. I think it would be best if I declined your offer of a fire and made my way to somewhere a little quieter.”

“But I’d hoped you’d stay a while.”

“Not this time, Princess.”

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Comments (5 so far!)

  1. Avatar HSAR

    Great sense of history between these two here, they’ve known each other long enough that some things don’t need to be said.

  2. Avatar Ford Dent

    Thanks, I really like allowing dialogue and tone to establish relationships/history between characters. I think it makes for stronger characterization.

    Of course now I have no idea what happens next, but that’s usually the case.

  3. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Cute back and forth, and I find the guy quite likable, in a rogue-ish sort of way. His confidence is fitting for someone who would be entangled with a princess.

  4. Avatar JonB

    Dabrose asserting his independence here – and she’s clearly not happy about that. He’ll probably live to regret it.

  5. Avatar Princess Binky Lemontwist (LoA)

    Very nice dialogue. I love how this is coming along! :D

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