Down and Out [Version 1]

Avatar Author: Abstract Kicking it at the University of Oklahoma. I like writing, science, almost all forms of music (literally), creating constructed languages, graphic/visual arts, and a good book. I will not hesitate in saying I am a Christia... Read Bio


It is not something one likes to bring to mind. The Everyman would deign to believe it is not he who will be the one in a million on whose number the roulette wheel settles, but someone must fill the position. That fateful evening, it was I.

I still remember the garish neon lights adorning the buildings casting long shadows as I walked down the thoroughfare, mulling over the latest project I had received at MegaCorp. A group of inebriated persons laughed boisterously under the marquee of an oxygen bar; a few isolated wanderers roamed the worn concrete sidewalks.

I have never quite eliminated my tendency to concentrate too much of my faculties on some thought process, try though I might. Agents of the company approached me from behind, my senses dulled as my mind focused its energies on dissecting the minutiae of my latest assignment. Had the shadows pointed elsewhere I might have noticed, but they did not favor me. The ambush was successful.

My consciousness faded, drowned out in a noxious miasma.

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Comments (4 so far!)

  1. Avatar Abstract

    This thing’s been kicking around in my Drafts folder ever since Sir Bic’s “wordiness is bliss” challenge. It was a backstory for Acrylic, which was uniquely suitable for such a challenge.

  2. Avatar JonB

    I like the portentous voice-over narration of this, and the subtle futuristic elements. It’s pretty wordy, so I imagine it fitted BiC’s original challenge brief (don’t kn0w exactly what that was).

    Overall, very engaging.

  3. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Quite the vocabulary in this one. At first it felt a bit more Midevil than the setting, but by the end it settles in nicely as how an intellectual might narrate their own first person experience.

  4. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Just finished an alternate story using your title in the challenge.

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