The word

Avatar Author: Job Hello, Please leave a comment, i would like to know what you think of my attempts at writing fiction. Please bear in mind that English is a language i had to learn in school, so if i get grammar or spelling wrong, cor... Read Bio

I went down the steps, counting them. My uncle told me there were precisely two hundred, but I didn’t feel I could trust him. Therefore I counted. My uncle didn’t lie.

The rite of growing up, held in high esteem in my town, forced me to go down the steps, to meet my destiny. Or some version of it. I never took it seriously, it seemed like something from long before, when people were still clinging to superstition.

When I got down into the room in which the ceremony would be held, I understood why the rite seemed so ridiculous to me. My uncle stood in the dim lit corridor, he tried to shout something to me, but someone pushed me into the blinding light of the sun, shining through the hole cut in the bedrock

The Reverend, whom I’d never seen before, opened his book. He looked eerie.
‘You come here, not knowing. You will go from here, knowing.’
I felt something in my spine, creeping up.
‘You will go from here, telling the world of the old ones, like the ones before you.
You will tell them of mighty Cthulhu’

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  1. Avatar Pablo Vilas

    Alright! I didn’t place the culture until I’d read the last word. Makes it a more engrossing read, a cool idea.

  2. Avatar D.E DeWitt

    Great job! Your description of the setting is well done through your character’s inner thoughts. Some of the grammar was clunky, which messed with me a bit, but I see that English is not your first language so I won’t hold it against you. Seriously – great job for not using the letter A.

  3. Avatar Job

    Thanks, I tried to get into the writing style of HP Lovecraft, wich might explain a bit of the the clunkyness. (I’m not very good at it yet)