Silly Rap

Avatar Author: Cariad Ceffyl Lover of Poetry, Prose, Fantasy, Nature, Spring and all things Celtic. A died in the wool hopelessly hopeless Romantic, on a journey of sorts. I write fiction although, occasionally loosely, Very loosely, influence by li... Read Bio

Waking up thinking
Thoughts still reeling
Been almost a year and
The heart isn’t healing
Loss getting harder
As the summer gets closer
It’s not getting easier
Gotta stop pondering
My mind from wondering
Back to the past
We said it would last
All that you said to me
Was any of it actually
The truth or fantasy
Why can’t I let go like you
And find someone else who
Would love me as I know you do.
God is the closest one I know
But He can’t physically hold me though

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  1. Avatar ethelthefrog

    I sense a theme developing.

    “All shall be well, and all shall be well and all manner of thing shall be well.”
    ― Julian of Norwich

  2. Avatar Cariad Ceffyl

    Yes it will be well, well with my soul.

  3. Avatar Tad Winslow

    I don’t see silliness here, playfulness, creativity, in the moment, yes. It’s not just rhyme for rhyme’s sake you’re saying some poignant things using that particular language device. Where you say ‘wondering’ and not ‘wandering’ is a great example of saying what you mean and not letting the rhyme dictate the poem. Great mix of perfect and imperfect rhyme. You have the skill. Great job.

  4. Avatar Tad Winslow

    I have to ask, did you mean ‘wandering’? It works either way, in fact, maybe better the way it is because I think of both words when I read ‘wondering’ whereas I wouldn’t think of ‘wondering’ if ‘wandering’ was there. I swear that makes sense.

  5. Avatar Cariad Ceffyl

    Wow Tad- I am humbled at your commentary. Thank You for seeing the worth and meaning here. That validation means a lot. As for the word wondering vs Wandering- my initial idea was as it is- but I see that with the next line “back to the past” – wandering would work as well- it’s one of those rhymes that the meaning can continue from the first thought then change the word/meaning with the next thought even though the word is not by definition- the actual one- does that make sense- I mean- I guess I could have written it " Gotta stop pondering
    my mind from wondering/wandering
    Back to the past.." But I think as it stands it allows the reader to actually do it themselves. I hope that makes sense

  6. Avatar Cariad Ceffyl

    You got it ;)