The Best Birthday In years

Avatar Author: Cariad Ceffyl Lover of Poetry, Prose, Fantasy, Nature, Spring and all things Celtic. A died in the wool hopelessly hopeless Romantic, on a journey of sorts. I write fiction although, occasionally loosely, Very loosely, influence by li... Read Bio

It was the best birthday I’d had in years. There was no cake, no ice cream, no balloons ; just he and I- on a blanket under the stars in a park, after dark.
It was the best because there was NO place I would rather have been than in his arms.
Then again…I could have been stranded in the middle of a garbage dump and it would not have mattered. As long as I was with him, nothing mattered.
Never before or since had anyone made me feel as loved, cared for or desired. It was the most beautiful two and a half months of my life. Excluding the birth of my son.
Never have I loved someone so completely and honestly as I did him. At least not since my first high school love.
Psychologists tell us there is a thing called seasonal depression or reactions to love and loss. A break-up like ours was like a death. So I guess I’m still mourning.
I just don’t understand! He sincerely loved me. At least it seemed so, when suddenly, without warning, a switch flipped and he despises me.
My crime….unconditional Love.

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  1. Avatar ...Still BARomero

    I’m not sure how to take this. On the one hand, there is some terrific emotional imagery here. But on the other hand, the transition from the feelings of love on her birthday to the post-breakup melancholia is so abrupt that it feels jarring. Perhaps you could expand this into two ficlies to help us get from point A to point B?

  2. Avatar Reaver19

    I disagree with Baromero’s comment only for the fact that it is so abrupt. 2 months isn’t long at all and it feels that you fell out of love just as fast as you fell in love. I really felt this piece as it hit on so many emotional levels.

  3. Avatar Cariad Ceffyl

    Wow! Thanks so much for the contrasting commentary- Rwaver19: he seemingly fell out of love- not the narrator. – BARomero: if it felt jarring then I succeeded in conveying that emotion she felt then. I had elaborated in the original draft but fell to that bloody character limit- but there wasn’t enough for a sequel. Thank you both so much.

  4. Avatar Drake West

    I see deep pain here. The highs torn asunder by the jarring breakup. The final line is the fallacy though, unconditional love cannot be given in a romantic relationship. That is just my opinion. It is really great to have her believe that, it heightens the drama.

  5. Avatar Cariad Ceffyl

    Thank you Mr.West. Although I do disagree- unconditional Love and Trust are what make a romantic relationship last throughout the good and especially bad- the catch.. It has to come from both persons- it cannot be One-sided

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