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Silence. I never expected that. At first I thought nothing had happened, that it hadn’t worked, but as the sound of bullets and bombshells waned and died and echoes fell silent throughout the bunker, the effect became clear. The war just stopped. I turned to Judith, her face as surprised as mine. She opened her mouth to speak.

And nothing came out. “What’s wrong,” I tried to ask. The answer became immediately apparent. We had all been Jinxed. Like school-children. As if we’d all spoken the same words at the same time, and were forever bound to silence until we carried out some act for the one who jinxed us all.

Which was me. Or so I thought. But then, why couldn’t I speak?

I looked down at the pendant, inset with the now-dimmed JINX button. It had been a gift from some high-tech, top-secret research facility. We were given no instructions. Just a pendant, “as a last resort.”

A tiny slip of paper emerged from the pendant’s bottom. It read:

Learn to communicate.

Of course.

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  1. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    Perfect command for this scenario!

    You captured the essence of a jinx, the mythos of the not being able to talk, and threw in 2 events that are cataclysmic, both war and peace.
    Mess is better than ever!

  2. Avatar Miz Em

    What she said, exactly! Also, where can I get one of those pendants? I’d like to use it on my husband.

  3. Avatar nuclearsubmarine

    Love it!

  4. Avatar inky blue

    I don’t know what the challenge was but this is weird! In a good way. I reckon there’d be a lot more peace if people couldn’t speak.

  5. Avatar Eloquent Mess {(LoA)}

    Thank you all! I wanted to make my return to Ficly memorable. This was a great challenge to start with!

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