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Firstly, I only exist in the Spirit World. I forget what dimention it is, 4th or 5th or something. No mere Human can find me!

I only ventured into the human world once. It was a disaster! I was bored with the Spirit World, so I made myself visible to humans, as a woman. Already, they had decided Death was a male, so I needed a better cover.

I went to a German bar. Why? I don’t know, just thought I’d like to. Anyway, I found a man there whose aura was glowing black. He was considering suicide. I should have let him.

But I tried to save him. I went over and spoke with him. I charmed him with curious words about dying, then tried to convince him to live. I pointed out a table of blonde-haired, blue-eyed people who were strong in their auras and told him they were strong. I pointed out a group of dark-haired Jews who had gathered outside the window and had dim auras without happiness. I told him they were holding themselves back from greatness by focusing on the bad things in life, like he was doing right now.

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  1. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Jarring switch, but I’ll give you credit for the boldness of the move, taking our rather silly excursion into such a dark and serious place.

  2. Avatar Kevin Lawver

    I see what you did there… It’s like a little sidebar trip down memory lane with the Grim Reaper. I like it.

  3. Avatar Stovohobo

    Nice look into Death’s consciousness. It doesn’t keep quite the same darkly comedic style as the others—it’s just dark—but that works pretty well with Death itself. Twisty flashback too.

  4. Avatar gĀ²LaPianistaIrlandesa

    pretty neat… only thing that bugs me is the dimension thing: we’re actually in the 4th because of the whole time element.
    Other than that intriguing. I still have to read the others, though…

  5. Avatar Textual Phoenix

    Wow! How can I describe this?

    THX and Kevin’s initial stories were a nice hot tub, easy to relax and joke around in.

    This is the bucket of ice water dumped on you by your fiancee. Extremely jarring, but oddly refreshing at the same time.

    Looking forward to reading “Death 2”. :-)

  6. Avatar OrangeOreos (LoA)

    Elsha, you pulled the Hitler card! Very dark, but a little funny at the same time. A very unexpected twist!

  7. Avatar The Fantastic Mister Fish

    i can relate to the pessimism thing.
    i take it this is set in Nazi Germany?

  8. Avatar The Fantastic Mister Fish

    i can relate to the pessimism thing.
    i take it this is set in Nazi Germany?

  9. Avatar Alexa Reed (LoA)

    I like the twist. Everyone tries to imagine killing Hitler when he was a cute, sweet little baby. This is much better, because he was a down-on-his-luck artist, and it would have been a lot easier to kill him rather than the baby.

  10. Avatar Nancy

    Wow… quite the twist AND you have Hitler in a German bar as a woman. Props!

  11. Avatar Nancy

    sorry, I meant WITH a woman… not AS a woman.

  12. Avatar Xanathael

    Nice hitler twist, with a hint of ‘what woulda happened if’. Nicely done!

  13. Avatar Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

    wow this was a little bit of a brain teaser there it hit me with an okey doke

  14. Avatar Clotifoth

    Heh, so death is a Nazi? Kind of a bit of irony there that the one time Death has tried to save one’s life, it led to the Holocaust xD

    It’s a bit jarring, but a decent transition from the previous ones. Everything before the flashback was the transition of tone that was pretty nice.

    Also, IT HAS A SEQUEL?!? :D

  15. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    wow i wrote this so long ago. yeah it just came out, ironic as it is..

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